Thanks, Troy. Now, in middle age, with my mortality staring at me every day, I've learnt to be a bit kinder. Good body, I say, as if it were a horse I ride. Click clack.
Eleanor, this is so lovely and haunting. Your narration elevates the writing, which doesn’t seem like a thing that’s possible to do. The score is also perfectly suited to the piece. It sounds like the real deal— Musicians, playing instruments that move air molecules. I can’t wait for another. Since you asked for some technical feedback, the only two points I have are to 1. upload the audio as the voiceover option so it’s compatible to play in the substack mobile app and 2. Consider, including a brief intro, introducing yourself as a writer and narrator. I think it makes a difference when someone connects the voice their hearing to the person who wrote the piece.
Ah, Ben thank you for this. I thought about doing an intro, but wasn't sure - I'll do it for the next one. And audio upload as voice over - Top Tip Thank you. 👍🏻
I'm not sure how long I'd been reading without the music when I realized it had stopped.
'Her children would say to their friends, “It’s what she wanted,” and to each other, “She wouldn’t listen.”'
Independent, self-sufficient lives.
(I just realized you use the American style of double quotation marks.)
I didn't know that was an American style ... always have... And I love that, that you didn't notice the music fade out. That's the effect we wanted.
Figured that with the music. Worked perfectly -- and you read so well. Yeah, Americans double-single, Brits single-double. Because of course. :)
Of course... 😂 And so pleased. There'll be a new one out in a couple of weeks.... And what a learning curve, audio is. Thanks for vote of confidence.
So haunting and evocative, Eleanor. We take these bodies and lives for granted until one day they become our prison. Click clack. Click clack.
Thanks, Troy. Now, in middle age, with my mortality staring at me every day, I've learnt to be a bit kinder. Good body, I say, as if it were a horse I ride. Click clack.
You and me both! I fear our horses may be tethered to the same carriage...
Eleanor, this is so lovely and haunting. Your narration elevates the writing, which doesn’t seem like a thing that’s possible to do. The score is also perfectly suited to the piece. It sounds like the real deal— Musicians, playing instruments that move air molecules. I can’t wait for another. Since you asked for some technical feedback, the only two points I have are to 1. upload the audio as the voiceover option so it’s compatible to play in the substack mobile app and 2. Consider, including a brief intro, introducing yourself as a writer and narrator. I think it makes a difference when someone connects the voice their hearing to the person who wrote the piece.
Ah, Ben thank you for this. I thought about doing an intro, but wasn't sure - I'll do it for the next one. And audio upload as voice over - Top Tip Thank you. 👍🏻
I love this, it really adds a whole other layer.
Thanks x
Oof, gut-wrenching. Absolutely loved the music. Bravo 👏
Thanks, Chloe x
Wonderful work.
I'm so glad you chose this for your first soundscape story! The music is perfect for it. ❤️
Thank you x
This hit me viscerally, making me think about something that happened to my mother a year before she died.
I was a fan of Alan Bennett's Talking Heads and I enjoyed this as much as I did them. Looking forward to more .
That is very kind, Jeff, and very generous. Willow's score is a marvel.
Yes, her score is great. Really blends well with the text and your voice.
The first time I heard it I cried my eyes out.
❤️
Wonderful, chilling, chilling
Aaah! A Harriet. Another piece of the Eleanor Puzzle. 🧩
🙃 xx
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