You're in good company, the structure, form, pace and duality, I'm curious in the read which feels prequel to doom, the uninvited skunk meandering beneath tables at a teaparty, so very English of you.
Points for style, the way you convey the disconnect early then building from nexxus through carnage of time/space and human nature.
I can tell. Isn't it fun to have all those voices speaking in your head? (Well, maybe sometimes not.) Many fiction writers are just okay at writing dialogue. Yours is lean and sharp, very natural. So is the interspersed scene description. Everything moves along crisply. If you haven't already, you might want to try a screenplay or play.
Hellish luncheon
😂
Hectic
I am trying not to get really annoyed by some of the characters, so they must be realistically portrayed...
Ha!
I'm so reminded of, "The yellow wallpaper"
You're in good company, the structure, form, pace and duality, I'm curious in the read which feels prequel to doom, the uninvited skunk meandering beneath tables at a teaparty, so very English of you.
Points for style, the way you convey the disconnect early then building from nexxus through carnage of time/space and human nature.
Still loving it.
It's so vivid, the chatter intercut with the activity. It comes alive, like a scene on film. Must have been fun writing it.
I love love love writing dialogue. Sometimes I get carried away. I hear them & see it like a film.
I can tell. Isn't it fun to have all those voices speaking in your head? (Well, maybe sometimes not.) Many fiction writers are just okay at writing dialogue. Yours is lean and sharp, very natural. So is the interspersed scene description. Everything moves along crisply. If you haven't already, you might want to try a screenplay or play.
"Ros would do anything to see her snap." - *raises hand* me too