Agreeing with Dr. Kate, I love that last paragraph's bird's eye of all the players. Feeling a bit half-baked myself, lately, I wonder if Mercury Ward has an opening? I feel certain I could do a better Madame Arcati than Ethel. 🔮👳🏻👁️
“Mercury Ward was like finding yourself in a hotel you’d forgotten you’d come to.” Such a vivid opening. Your descriptions of the place and people, right down to details like the tray of Petri dishes and pleated paper cups — superb. This and ch.9 are particularly wrenching.
The ending leaves the reader curious and eager to know more about what unfolds next, especially with the contrasting scenes of the ward settling down for the night and the distant party gearing up. It's a compelling read, and I'm intrigued to learn more about these characters and their interconnected stories.
Hello Mr Tommy Swerdlow. Being a Big Fan of your work, I'm pretty made up to hear you say that. Here's to you having a beautiful day, best wishes Eleanor.
Agreeing with Dr. Kate, I love that last paragraph's bird's eye of all the players. Feeling a bit half-baked myself, lately, I wonder if Mercury Ward has an opening? I feel certain I could do a better Madame Arcati than Ethel. 🔮👳🏻👁️
That last paragraph brings it together with so many sensory details. I feel like I'm THERE, looking in the mirror as well...
“Mercury Ward was like finding yourself in a hotel you’d forgotten you’d come to.” Such a vivid opening. Your descriptions of the place and people, right down to details like the tray of Petri dishes and pleated paper cups — superb. This and ch.9 are particularly wrenching.
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This is superb!
I love the way Tessa's paranoia and isolation come out in the little linguistic details, "which everyone?", "no one being Claire". Wonderful
The ending leaves the reader curious and eager to know more about what unfolds next, especially with the contrasting scenes of the ward settling down for the night and the distant party gearing up. It's a compelling read, and I'm intrigued to learn more about these characters and their interconnected stories.
Good stuff. The main character, Tessa?, oozes paranoia.
So good. You see every frame... and you root for them.
Go on Eleanor, lay it down. I don't know if you know it, but you sure write it like you do.
Hello Mr Tommy Swerdlow. Being a Big Fan of your work, I'm pretty made up to hear you say that. Here's to you having a beautiful day, best wishes Eleanor.
More. I can’t wait